I told someone quite awhile ago (can’t recall who) that
I would post my first waka on my blog. Soooo…..here it is.
Awestruck by the Sky
Fluffy Periwinkle wing
Race the redding clouds
Now blended together pass
Into the dark evening shade
I hope this poem puts a pleasant picture into your mind and captures the sky forever in type. I must say, there are many better waka writers even in the modern world, but I thought I would try anyway. Writers like M.kei manage to express their intense feelings in one tight, but still intense and captivating poem.
Note: I would not recommend the poet, M.kei, to readers under 15 years old due to some problems he expresses in rather extreme detail.
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Apparently it has taken me this long to read the waka carefully. And I don’t know what to say about it other than that I like it.
Brevity must surely be a virtue.
(I’ve come to love that banner-image, too. The beauty of the sun and sky is obviously its focus, but the presence of cars and their miniature lights in the photo–which I would have detested–puts me in mind of the transience of man, which is helpful.)
I hope you haven’t given up poetic endeavors.
once again i must apologize for being late, i don’t check comments very often.
yeah,the cars in header kinda bug me sometimes too,but i put up with them because i like the sun on the horizon and our camera is broken.
no, I haven’t given up on writing poetry, as i think i would literally go insane if i did not write SOMETHING everyday!
Lastly, I can’t forget the whole topic of this comment, I am glad you liked my waka.